Winter's Blessing [E] A tailor finds that the spirits are kinder than they seem. |
Hi Vera, This is a wonderful story. The tone is tinged with annoyance and confusion. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the woman in the story will alright by herself during the snowfall. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a woman who decides to go for a walk on a day where everything seems to be going wrong. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention. 1)"I don't know- I could be dying, but I don't feel a thing. What are you, and can I go home?", she asked. "I shall not tell you my true name, but I am the one who gave you more snow. And yes, I will take you back.", he replied. "You're the one who did it? I- why, you nearly froze me, along with the entire village! Why would-" "I thought you wanted it." And the snow stopped falling.-This paragraph needs to be broken up into paragraphs to account for the two pieces of dialogue. The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
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