Hello Vita Amare

Here is a review for your "The Next Sunset" .

Comments and Observations:

This piece has such a lovely, reflective quality. I sensed some introspection and a calming feeling in your words. It made me stop and think about the words and the quiet beauty of a sunset.

I looked at this piece from several angles and I liked it very much.

First, the vivid images. "the sun taps down on the horizon" "the ocean slaps the sand" “warm breeze... scent of salt”

Next, the tone and the mood which is slightly sad due to the end-of-the-day setting. Then, “one less count of twenty-four hours” adds a sense of time passing.

The flow is also good, but if I may suggest, hinting at your feelings about life's fleeting nature, and also, capturing more of the state of your mind at the ending with something like, "until the next sunset" or "I'll be here again for the next sunset," would give the piece a bit more personal and poetic touch. Then just maybe, instead of offering the piece in one block, you might consider using short paragraphs in it.

Overall, this piece is a well-composed beauty and it reflects a relatable moment for me.

Suggestions on the text as to grammar, usage, and punctuation

I saw no problems in this area.

Best wishes with your work.



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .