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  |  | Starship Sentry  [E] Two stories, two genres, read it once and get "new eyes" to read it again.  |
| (5.0)  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"   First Impressions: This story has 343 ratings so I can’t imagine that there is anything I could say that you haven’t heard before, and yet here I am because I spotted it in your short stories folder and found the description very intriguing. You’ve been here about as long as I have but my most popular story only has 123 ratings, so 343 is a huge achievement! And it’s well deserved. I have to admit that I didn’t follow the instructions at the end because I didn’t get that far on the first read. When I hit the line that explained in which star system the Sentry was developed, I suddenly got it and went back to the beginning to confirm my theory. I feel like I missed out on the surprise of the twist at the end. It took me quite a while though while I attributed the Sentry’s peculiar way of referring to ‘Commander’ and other slightly odd ways of speaking to the fact that he was a robot or a computer programme. It’s amazing how well this worked as two different stories, or rather, the same story in two different genres.  Suggestions: I didn’t notice any errors and I don’t have any suggestions, so I’m going to point out a section that I thought was particularly well done, which was when the Sentry detected another Sentry and his reaction to it. Knowing now what was going on there, I felt that part worked really well, both on the first and the second read.  Final Thoughts: This was a very clever and original tale and I wonder what inspired it. You didn’t say if this was a contest entry but if it was, I’d be curious what the prompt was (not that you’re likely to remember after all this time). If it wasn’t, I applaud your creativity. You came up with a very interesting tale, and while I’m not a fan of sci-fi because I often find it a bit too technical for my liking, I didn’t have any problems understanding this one - or so I thought  . It was a good idea to recommend the second read as well, which I spoiled for myself but I got to experience some of it. A very good story, I enjoyed the read!  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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