Hi Priscil,

This is a fantastic piece. The tone is intense. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Drake and Millicent are actually close. They will read to the last word to find out. The piece is about a woman who is demonstrating to a male companion how nasty she can be. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the piece. The piece is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.