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 |  | The Herald  [E] The tempest screams a warning in the night.  |
| (5.0)   HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"   Greetings, Angels in my Ear! I am reviewing this because I am part of the WdC Anniversary Account Review Team, and this month happens to be your 12th WdC Anniversary!  First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest. The Positives/What I Liked Wow! This is very impressive, Aundria.  Your words flow along so nicely and keep me entranced. The visuals are vivid and well done, such as:The ivy vines beat desperately at the glass begging to escape its wrath.  I think my favorite lines are:It's as if the world were holding its breath, waiting, waiting. Suggestions/Comments to ConsiderIn the very last stanza above the last line, I wonder if you might consider replacing the period with either a comma or no punctuation at all, as the line space gives the reader pause before the final line (which is an awesome way to end this piece, BTW!) Example of the change: the wind rushes by on a forlorn breath,[replaced period] warning of the storm once more. [uncapped the w] It's up to you, of course. Just something to think about.  Other than that, I have no other suggestions. Final ThoughtsAgain, this is very impressive, Aundria. I enjoyed reading it very much.  A Review from: "Positive Hearts Reviews Group" Have a great day and... K e e p on W r i t i n g ! Cubby ")
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