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Given: Nov 18, 2024 at 4:13pm
Length: 1,165 Characters |
1,159 w/o WritingML
Hi aditri,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is filled with confusion and fear but abruptly changes to sinister and cold. This takes all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the speaker's wife can still be saved. They will read to the last word to find out. In the story, a man finds his wife drowned in the bathtub and calls for help. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is well developed and believable. The story concentrates on the husband, and he comes across as a real person. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:
1)You have neglected to either double space or indent between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.
The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.
You responded to this review 11/23/2024 @ 12:38am EST
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