Hi chimgen,

This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read immediately to find out more. You introduce the topic with a brief discussion of Wengui's conviction for fraud. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about the crimes of Guo Wengui. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.