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 Of Friends and Keyboards on WdC Open in new Window. [E]
A poem to my friends on WdC
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Greetings, Joey!

I hope you’re doing well, dealing with all the hurricane aftermath.

This is a lovely ode to our great writing community, covering all the points of why we are here. One tiny thing that kinda bugs me is the GIF right at the top… as a person with sensory sensitivity, I find it mildly distracting. It reminds me of the early-00’s cartoon with the kid with a football shaped head. And if I stare at it long enough I realize that’s not even a real QWERTY keyboard they’re pounding away at… *Crazy* *Rolling*

Scrolling down away from such foolishness, I find the poem itself to be heartfelt and sincere. It took me a couple of reads through to discover the “melody” you were aiming at; for a while I wanted to say it felt rather “clunky,” as if your lines were too long. But looking at it again on my iPad, the tune clicked and now it sounds like it has a really good flow. I see you’ve used exactly 13 syllables per line, which is a fine achievement; when I write poetry and I want it to rhyme without actually using a structured form, I end up being more flexible on syllable counts than perhaps is wise.

My perspective on poetry has matured since I last reviewed one of yours; indeed, I would hope my entire writing instinct has been fine-tuned over the eighteen months or so I’ve been a member here. I can wholeheartedly agree with everything you’ve said here, and I admire your choice of form and rhythm. I used to eschew counting syllables; thanks to Lilli’s Promptly Poetry Challenge, I’ve learned to count them and found it’s not as hard as I thought. Kind of a no-brainer usually, really.

So yeah… if you’re looking for professional advice, I don’t really have any. This is good poetry, and… honestly, didn’t I review it last year? I see the creation date is from ’23. It seems familiar, in a comfortable way. But there’s no record of one, so here ya go *BigSmile*

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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