Hi RONLOZ,

This is a fantastic chapter. The chapter opens with GF just starting to grow. The reader is wondering why she is growing at such an amazing rate and will read on to find out more. This is a wonderful opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the story. The reader wants to find out if anyone can stop GF from her massive destruction. The dialogue is well done and realistic. GF speaks like a real person. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on GF, and she comes across as a real person. Great job.