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 |  | A Box of Weeds  [18+] Flash fiction stories...  |
| (5.0)   HAPPY 6th WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"   Greetings, IceSkatingSugarCube! I am reviewing this because I am part of the WdC Account Anniversary Review Team, and your account birthday just happens to be today! Six years! Geesh, it seems like you've been here longer than that, though I haven't noticed you around as much as you used to be. Your handle is such a welcoming one, I always smile when I see it.  First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest. The Positives/What I Liked This flash fiction piece is very well written. Noting the three bolded words, artist, home, and water, I'm assuming they were the prompted words for a flash fiction contest. Great job! They didn't feel forced or planted or in anyway, a distraction. I especially liked how you described the homemade instrument in detail. I could picture the man playing on the street corner as listeners dropped coins and bills into his hat. What I hadn't expected (and I love surprises!) was the fact that the artist carried a credit card machine in his bag.  He was definitely prepared for the woman who offered to buy his homemade instrument for more than he asked for it. And I'm pretty sure that wasn't the first time.   I always enjoy listening to artists playing their instruments on street corners. The last time I witnessed one was in Tombstone, Arizona. A fiddle player entertained the tourists with some great tunes, and he was good!  My favorite lines: A jaunty, simple melody floats on rustic wings through the town. He’s made so many instruments by now that he can play anything with one string or twelve. I happen to love stringed instruments and could easily visualize this scene, hearing the melodies. It's amazing how talented many unknown street musicians are. Suggestions/Comments to Consider“Would you sell your instrument to me?” She asks  “Would you sell your instrument to me?” she asks No need to capitalize the s in she, as it's a dialogue tag. Nothing else stood out to me. Great job! Final ThoughtsI enjoyed this piece very much. You've done a great job with it. Again, Happy 6th WdC Account Anniversary! And seriously... I hope to see you around more.  A Review from: "Positive Hearts Reviews Group" Have a great day and... K e e p on W r i t i n g ! Cubby ")
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