Hi Sarahblackwellstories,

This is a wonderful story. The tone is full of frustration. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Edward will interfere with Angela's Thanksgiving Dinner. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a woman who is tormented by a ghost while trying to cook Thanksgiving Dinner for her in-laws. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well defined. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)You have neglected to either double space or indent between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.