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 Autumn Open in new Window. [E]
I am not a writer; I'm just bored. I am becoming more and more bored as the days go on.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

This professedly casual and “throwaway” poem is quite deep in a nonsensical way. It reminds me of some of the earliest lyrics written by Imagine Dragons lead singer Dan Reynolds for his fledgling band. You can listen to Emma, for instance… “bourbon streets and bicycles, holding you in carnivals…” The quaintness and quirkiness of the words is evident.

You have six lines with a steady AAAAAA rhyme scheme, which, combined with the series of questions, provides a rhythm resembling a rap or a song. It displays a certain creative skill which is nice to see, especially considering it’s a sort of stream of consciousness item, spun off carelessly. You should take writing poetry or song lyrics more seriously… you’ll find it fun and rewarding.

I would suggest using a larger font size, preferably Size 4 Verdana. You may also want to center the text to provide a more focused reading experience. These simple edits can be done with the row of tiles at the top of the text editing box. You can click on the question mark between the M and the smiley for a helpful handbook on our proprietary markup language.

You could try entering this into two contests: "Fox's Socks Newbie Poetry Contest" Open in new Window. and "First and Second Chance Poetry Contest" Open in new Window.. Best of luck and I hope you enjoy yourself around here! It’s impossible to be bored on WdC because of all the contests to experiment with.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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