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 | To Delight in Exceptional Gifts  [13+] A woman gives a very special gift to her mother  |
| (4.5)  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"   First Impressions: That was unfortunate! The main character got carried away in her happiness and fell victim to her own curse. It seems like she had been waiting for this moment for a long time, but she didn’t get to enjoy it for long. Perhaps it was justice for what she had done, that she didn’t get to live a long and happy life, but after what she had to endure, the readers will feel a certain amount of empathy for her plight. It was also a somewhat unexpected ending, after I felt quite smug that I had worked out what her plan was pretty much from the start. As soon as she asked if the gift would ‘work’, I knew she was planning something bad. But then you surprised me with that twist at the end that I hadn’t seen coming.  Suggestions: The story was well written and I only noticed a couple of errors: Nothing out of the usual, mother. I believe the phrase is “out of the ordinary”. Or maybe she could say, “Nothing unusual.” her skin more taught. I think that was meant to say, “taut”. You mentioned that this story won the Cramp (congrats!) but I would be interested to know what the prompt was. I always find it interesting what inspired a story. You probably don’t remember after all this time as this is not a new story, but for future stories, it might be worth including those details.  Final Thoughts: At first, I didn’t particularly warm to Laura who was planning to kill her mother, but when I met the mother, I found a certain amount of understanding for her actions. Her mother’s reaction to being given such a lovely gift (as she thought) was infuriating, and it seemed like the whole of Laura’s life was like that. Still, the ending felt fair, and even Laura herself narrated the last couple of lines as if she understood this. I thought that was particularly well done, and I enjoyed the read!  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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