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 A Reflection of Light Open in new Window. [E]
A poignant exploration of lost love and the hope for a return, through reflection.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

Well, I'm about to stick my foot in my mouth again. Please forgive me for this outrageous statement. AI generated content is a controversial subject around here, and I like to test people's work before I review it. So I pasted your poem into https://www.zerogpt.com/ and it came out 0% AI generated. Not happy with that, I pasted it into my personal favorite site, https://quillbot.com/ai-content-detector and was horrified to find they marked it 100% AI generated *Shock2*

I'm beyond dismayed and embarrassed. This has nothing to do with you; I'm not accusing you of anything. Rather, I'm asking you quite humbly to set me straight and assure me you wrote this lovely poem yourself. (And perhaps reassure others as well, by adding a note at the top of your item... Since this is a public review *Blush*) You must be quite insulted by my impertinence.

Putting all fears aside, I'll do my best to review this in the same way I would anyone else *Smile*

Your rhyme and meter is charming, lending a sweet triteness to the metaphors like a Valentine's poem. We don't see any hint this love has "flown the coop," except for your subtitle. Considering that, we realize it is a contemplation of a past relationship.

I admire the creative language you have here, portraying the beauty of your lady love in new and fresh ideas which are at once picturesque and entirely decent. The theme comes through of comparing her to things in nature: sunrise, starry skies, etc. And at the end we see it's her wise and kindly spirit which is most impressive. This is the cherry on top, letting us know the narrator values his love beyond her body and through into her soul.

All in all, this is perfect, like a Hallmark card brought to life in our minds. It could even be a song, if you added a repeating verse at beginning and end to summarize the theme, perhaps one capturing the thought expressed in the subtitle, of having lost this wondrous love and only dreaming of what was, seeking wholeness in your memories of her.

You can try entering this into several poetry contests around the site, such as "First and Second Chance Poetry Contest" Open in new Window. and "Fox's Socks Newbie Poetry Contest" Open in new Window. when it reppens. I can't tell what size and style of font you've used while on mobile, but I always recommend Size 4 Verdana for the best reading experience across devices. You can adjust these things by playing with the row of tiles above the text entry box. Check out "Writing.Com 101" Open in new Window. for help.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Quill* *HeartT*


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