Hi Angus,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of impatience and frustration. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering how Rick will get to sleep. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a man who is suffering from insomnia after deliberately staying awake on a bet. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.