Hi Chrys,

This is a fantastic chapter. The chapter opens with a statement that JT was not sleeping. The reader is wondering why this is the case and will read on to find out. This is a fantastic opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. You have set up your main character and plot very well for the reader. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's interest, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on JT, and he comes across as a real person. Great job.