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 | Christmas Surprise  [E] Noah and his surprise for Santa. - Writer's Cramp Entry  |
| (5.0)| Hallo! I saw your entry to "The Writer's Cramp" and got curious about what you'd done with the prompt!Here's my review: 1. The title, brief description and genres work well. The layout is easy to read. Maybe you could think of adding a cover pic. 2. The last line of the first paragraph is a real hook for the reader to read on. 3. I love the hand sanitizer! What a cute touch! And Mrs. Claus being proud!  4. While reading about his laughter I wondered how it didn't waken the household!  5. The pickle sandwich made me smile! 6. You say he 'left' two notes before he 'left' the house - I found the word 'left' repeated and think maybe another word would work better. Also, if Santa's are called 'notes', would you like to call Noah's 'notes' as well? 7. I wasn't expecting the scene back at the North Pole, that was a nice touch. 8. The conclusion, that it was the warmth, creativity and care that really mattered, left me warm and fuzzy! Thanks for sharing this one! Write On, Sonali  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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