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Given: Dec 14, 2024 at 7:46pm
Length: 885 Characters |
880 w/o WritingML
Hi RONLOZ,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is full of excitement. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what Sofia will wish for. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a girl who grows huge and reeks havoc. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:
1)So I asked-There should be a comma after "So".
The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
You responded to this review 12/14/2024 @ 7:48pm EST
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