Hi Fyn,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about how each move we make influences the structure of time. I don't think about things like this often and was taken with this poem enormously. I read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.