Hey there Bethany!

The algorithm has decided to feature your piece, so I’ve decided to leave a review! To make things easy for you, I’ll split my thoughts into three parts: subject, form, and philosophy.

First up, subject. Love is kind of the universal undertone of writing, even when you're not writing romance. Young love, however, is definitely its own thing. It's...different. I sound so old saying that lmao but it's true; young love has a special flavor of its own. I think by default all young writers do a great job of capturing this, and you are no exception. I read this and was instantly reminded of the poetry I wrote back when I was your age, and experiencing something very very similar. It's a solid choice for a subject.

In general, there's not many specific changes I'd suggest. The obvious thing is that there seems to be 4 lines on one line ("I never knew...If you care). This is a solid start for a piece, so really the only thing I'd recommend is to play around with the literal formatting, the way the words look on the paper. The great thing about free verse poetry is that we're not bound by syllabic meter or conventional formatting, so we can use spacing and formatting to creatively emphasize or draw attention to things we really want the reader to focus on.

That said, I really did enjoy this piece! If you decide to revisit this piece at any point, I'd just rethink the formatting. Experiment and see what works for the piece!

Happy writing!
-Novaire