Hi Kazzie,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if the speaker will start actually hurting people. They will read to the last word to find out. In the story, someone is frustrated when their well meaning acts of kindness only get them anger in return. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on the speaker, and they come across as a real person. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.