Hey Kazzie!

Welcome to WDC! The algorithm has decided to feature your piece, so I’ve decided to leave a review! I like to review pieces for the subject matter, style/composition, and then your thesis.

So let's talk subject matter: infidelity. I don't really like writing about infidelity, as I find the idea personally abhorrent, but I will admit that it is a very useful literary tool (when used smartly) and it is definitely a subject matter that you can take in any direction, happy or sad.

Mechanically, there's not much for me to say. This feels like a great, thought-out prompt more than it does an actual story, so I'd encourage you to revisit this and expand it! There's a lot to write about here, like I said, so there's plenty of love for you to give this piece. That said, from what is here, I can confidently say that I like some of your usages of imagery here: the line "Smelling like gin and cheap perfume" is great, and I also like the opening line as a hook. There's some discrepancy with tenses here (alternating present and past), and some small grammatical errors, but I feel that with a little attention, you could turn this into a great short story.

Thesis-wise, I think you're on the right path. There's definitely some real, tangible emotion behind this writing, and I find that I want to be invested in what's happening. Again, turning this into a proper piece I think would really help you deliver on your emotion and give the reader what they want.

That said, I think this a good thought/prompt. It's a good start, and I think it has the potential to become something really neat. Let me know if you have any questions about my review or if you want to talk things over; I love helping new writers!

Happy writing!
-Novaire