Hello, Lorilady!


INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:

I enjoyed reading your "Merry Christmas" poem every time I read it, including today.

Your writing kept me interested and I read straight through to the end.



MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:

Happy Writing.Com Anniversary day and month! I read this "Merry Christmas" poem of yours sometime in the past and enjoyed it, but didn't have time to review it right then, so I flagged it for an anniversary review (meaning I saved the link to it in a special "December" file. ). I hope you enjoy this review as a celebration of your time here and find the review uplifting and encouraging.

I could totally relate to this "Merry Christmas" poem of yours. You expressed so many beautiful wishes for a great variety of people and circumstances that I felt your caring heart as I read your beautiful poem.

I suspect that most people who celebrate Christmas could relate to and would enjoy this poem of yours.

My favorite stanza was the second to last one because I'd sure like to win that battle, and I have some dear friends who are also in such battles.

I thought you did a great job with representing the spirit of Christmas with your "Merry Christmas" poem.

I thought the Holiday, Family, and Cultural genres you selected were appropriate for this blog post (and overall blog) of yours.



IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER:

In the spirit of helpfulness, I have one little suggestion to make your piece stronger. If you're interested in some constructive criticism, read on. But if you aren't, no worries. Just know that I enjoyed your piece and move on to the next section.

Still reading? You're brave! Yay for you!

There are a few places that need punctuation. I know that it's optional for poets to use punctuation, and sometimes I don't in my own poems, but you did use some. So when it's necessary but missing in other places, it stands out and kind of slows down the reading. Here's one example:

Right now your line looks like this: "But lets not forget."

I believe you mean "let us" by "lets," in which case, I believe the grammatically correct thing would be to have it as "let's." That signifies the combination of the two words to the reader.

However, your poem is still great, in my opinion. The message is the best thing about it, and it is beautiful.

As with any review, please take what serves you and release or ignore what doesn't.


CONCLUSION:
I enjoyed reading your "Merry Christmas" poem, and empathized with your sentiments that you expressed in it.

Thank you for sharing your time, creativity, heart, experiences, and writing with the Writing.Com community!

Once again, happy anniversary day and month! I hope the year ahead is filled with blessings and joy for you!

May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!
PWheeler










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