Hi Strychnine,

This is a fantastic piece. The tone is full of despair and agony. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if this soul will find the peace it so desperately seeks. They will read to the last word to find out. In the piece, a lost soul reaches out to the World to find peace in a time of turmoil and sorrow. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on the entity asking for mercy and peace on behalf of the soul, and they come across as a real person. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the piece. The piece is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.