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 Noah and Oliver's and the Magical Oak Open in new Window. [E]
Two cats with magical powers and their adventures
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

Ah, a writer of children’s stories. I love writing and reading them myself; in fact I’m very much a kid at heart *InLove2*

This is a charming tale of a magical adventure featuring two cat friends. It has a conflict and a resolution, but lacks any particular character development aside from learning the Oak tree speaks to them. There is no specific reason why Sneaky Sam, whoever he is, would want to summon a storm, and it seems a lot has been left unsaid for simplicity and brevity.

Now, this isn’t necessarily a bad thing, as it depends largely on the age group you’re writing for. If you have very young kids in mind, it’s better to keep the action tame and the evildoers at arm’s length, and a story brief enough to be read at bedtime. Older kids, however, will appreciate a deeper dive into character motivations, interactions, dialogue, and plot twists, which could stretch your length into a thousand words or more. “What if” is a great question to ask yourself as you consider different elements and scenarios to incorporate into your story.

Adding any further content will require you keep an eye on your word counts… for that matter, I highly recommend adding a word count to each subtitle so we can decide if it’ll make a good bedtime story or if it requires more time. I also recommend using WdC formatting language (which can be accessed by using the tiles lined up on top of the text entry box) to make your items Size 4 Verdana, which is an excellent choice for keeping the page clean and engaging.

Another thing I would venture to add is the dreaded “did you use AI” inquiry. Something about the writing style bugs me, but I’m not going to paste it into one of those AI content detectors because they simply aren’t reliable or accurate. Maybe it needs more dialogue, or maybe it’s just me being hyper sensitive. I can’t pin down anything specific to tell you to change to make it sound more “human.” At any rate, it’s a sweet and fluffy little piece which a young child would enjoy.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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