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 Evidence  Open in new Window. [18+]
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Greetings, Carly!

I'm here as a fellow member of I Write 2025.

An amusing, almost satirical flash piece. I enjoy reading shorts like these because they're over quickly, usually with a snappy catch at the end. You've set up a situation ripe for humor while sharing a theme of acceptance and kindness.

As a flash contest entry, I understand it's hard to get enough "story" into it. I might suggest, when the day is over, going in and adding a bit of narrative at the beginning to center the "I" who is speaking. Opening with suspended dialogue is a bit confusing as we move from one speaker to another.

I'd also recommend adding three relevant genres, such as LGBTQ+, Drama, and Friendship or Emotional.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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