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 | A Love Letter from the Boogeyman  [13+] My name is Nox, and I live under your bed.  |
| (5.0)| Greetings, teefies! Welcome to this international community of writing inspiration and support. The following observations are offered in the spirit of friendly hospitality and constructive support, but they are nothing more than one person's opinions, so take them or leave them for whatever you think they may be worth. TITLE: Unless your name is Edgar Allan Poe, or that of some other famous storyteller, whose reputation is enough to attract a fawning audience, the title is one of the most important elements of any composition, because it is the portal through which a prospective reader must pass to enter the realm of your imagination. It sets the tone and prepares the reader for what is to come. If that entrance does not spark some sort of interest, chances are he or she will move along to the next item, or maybe even the next author. The brazenness of the sign on this gateway appeals to any fan of the spooky. OPENING HOOK: Once you have enticed the readers into your world, you must give them a reason to care or something to grab their attention so they will not drift away. That specific detail "under your bed" in the first line draws your reader into this scene very effectively. NARRATIVE: Imagery is the lifeblood of a story. Like a craftsman carving, molding, painting, and polishing wood, stone, clay, or some other material, the creative writer uses words to shape and paint pictures which present some lyrical impulse or spiritual truth. Rather than TELLING the audience about those feelings, the writer SHOWS the impressions through distinct images that project emotional overtones and associations with other images and events. In this way, the wordsmith stirs an emotional response from the reader. The vivid details provided by your narrator maintain a firm grip on your audience's consciousness from beginning to the very end. The shifting from descriptive paragraphs to brief, seductive lines of commentary helps to control the pacing and maintain a sense of intensity. OVERALL IMPRESSION: Art happens in two places: in writers' minds as they create it, and in readers' minds as they perceive it. Creative writers explore possibilities through a lens colored by past experience and share them with an unseen audience. They call upon a unique reservoir of such enlightenment, conceptual skill and innovative research to evoke some spiritual reaction from your audience--be it joy, melancholy, shock, or any of a thousand others. In this case, you have entranced the reader with a creepy relationship. Thank you for sharing your literary charm with a grateful audience! Here's wishing you fair winds as you continue to navigate this universe known as Writing.Com. Let the creativity flow from your soul!  Dave "The Poet's Place " * All items are rated in accordance with the guidelines provided in "Comment-In-A-Box" . My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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