Hello, SaltybutCutee!


INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:

I enjoyed reading your "January" poem today.

Your writing kept me riveted and I read straight through to the end.



MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:

Happy Writing.Com Anniversary day and month! It turns out we share an anniversary day! I hope you enjoy this review as a celebration of your time here and find the review uplifting and encouraging.

Your poem was a nice read for me on this January evening. Even though you wrote it ten days ago, it feels just as perfect today. This is a time of new beginnings for thew world, and also a time for a new us, for those of us who are working to better ourselves.

I thought your poetic description of how the year goes in this poem was fun and had lots of elements of truth.

My favorite line was the "Oh, wait. It's already October. What did we plant this year?" because it made me smile widely.

I wondered if this poem was written for a challenge or contest here?

I didn't notice any spelling or grammatical mistakes (or mistakes of any kind) in your "January" poem.

I appreciated how you brought the poem full circle at the end.



IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER:

In the spirit of helpfulness, and because of the requirements of a new reviewing challenge I joined recently, I have one little suggestion to make your piece stronger. If you're interested in some constructive criticism, read on. But if you aren't, no worries. Just know that I enjoyed your piece and move on to the next section.

Still reading? You're brave! Yay for you!

If you did write this poem for a contest or challenge here, I'd encourage you to share that information. I tend to do that with mine, in a "notes" section below the poem. People have commented that they really like knowing that information and having the contest links. Also, in the notes section it's nice to note whether it's a free verse or form poem (though this definitely seemed like a free verse poem to me, no note required), and the number of lines.

Another thing doesn't really have to do with the writing, but it could be helpful for getting more people to see your poem, and that is to delete the "other" genre and add three that people are more likely to search for. Perhaps "experience," "personal," and "holiday" could work? Just take a look at the list and pick whatever three you think most apply. I have had people tell me that they found my poems through such searches, so it can make a difference.

As with any review, please take what serves you and release or ignore what doesn't.


CONCLUSION:

I enjoyed reading your "January" poem, and thank you for the smile it gave me.

Thank you for sharing your time, creativity, heart, experiences, and writing with the Writing.Com community!

Once again, happy anniversary day and month! I hope the year ahead is filled with blessings and joy for you!

May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance during this New Year, your anniversary month, and always!

PWheeler










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