Hello The Puppet Master

I found this story on the "Plug" page



What the title says to me

"A graveside visit" could mean one of two things, perhaps a visit to a loved one or something more sinister, so as this was billed as a horror/scary story I figured it would be the latter....

The opening paragraph

Immediately had my attention as it set the scene straight away. The writer tells us it is 1850 and the style of writing makes me believe it is the 19th Century. I liked the description of the gravestones and the grass crunching underfoot which helps the reader to picture the scene.

The plot

As I read through the story of our main character meeting Poe at his graveside I was not sure where the story was going or how it was going to end - the end was a bit of a shock! but then it is a horror story after all!

What I liked best

I loved the writing style but my favourite line is probably -

"He took the bottle and drank it, but without a body it just dripped on the ground. "

It reminded me of that scene in Casper where the ghosts are eating and drinking but the food is falling to the floor. Or in that "Pirates of the Caribbean" movie where the crew are all dead.

Anyway it's a vivid image and kind of injects a bit of light heartedness I think.

Suggestions

"Correct. 'Tis I. I have been sent to accompany you on your journey to beyond."

I don't really know why but for some reason I think it would be better to say "The Beyond" rather than just "Beyond" - not sure if that is really grammatically correct though!

In Conclusion.....

I loved your story, it really felt like a 19thC horror story, the ending was unexpected and ties in with the horror theme. I liked the way I can picture the scene from your descriptions.









My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .