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 Poppies, Sunflowers and Roses Open in new Window. [E]
We must set aside our differences or face our extinction.
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Greetings!

I found this fascinating piece using the Random Read and Review Button.

How interesting: a poem arranged like a song, complete with a detailed description of the corresponding music video. It carries a strong theme of international peace and reminds us we must all come together or face a rapidly crumbling world.

I like the free verse; I can picture the solemn narration of the lines with your video description. It gives me questions as to whether this is a sort of essay about a video which does indeed exist, or if it's entirely something you've created in words in the hope of one day seeing it brought to reality.

I would recommend adding line spaces between the different parts to keep it tidy. I can't tell what size font you've used on mobile, but I like to tell everyone to use Size 4 Verdana so it's nice and clear and takes full prominence on the page. A line count is a helpful thing to add at the bottom, and perhaps the notes could be kept in a dropnote for tidiness.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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