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Review by Sung'manitu Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
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First, welcome to writing dot com. I hope you thoroughly enjoy your time here and find it fruitful.

I love the lines where poems are like trees, and are nothing like trees. It’s a sort of like Schrödinger's cat: poems being like and unlike trees simultaneously.

I like where you’ve placed the punctuation in the following lines. When I hear these words spoken in my mind, I can hear the hesitation caused by excitement. The excitement of being some place where you can do something you want to do, and share your creations with like minded individuals.

The last line seems out of place, however. Up until that point, I can hear the excitement and conviction in your poetry. The last line just falls flat.

Anyway, welcome again to WDC, and good luck with your writing.

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