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 The Robot and the Ghost Open in new Window. [13+]
A case for a robot detective.
by Kotaro Author Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Greetings, Kotaro!

I noticed this on my sidebar yesterday and couldn't resist.

It's a heartwarming tale of a friendly robot detective helping out a damsel in distress, with the added twist of her being a vengeful ghost. I love how Isaac's well-meaning character comes through in the creative use of first person perspective; it makes for such an engaging read. I like how he described his office and distinguished it from that of a "noir" human detective. (Does Isaac have any built-in defense mechanisms?) The final solution is amusingly simple, requiring a calculation on the part of Issac of an experience he'd never had before.

This is the kind of setup I'd love to see made into a series; you have a lot of storytelling potential here, maybe even as a set of "Hardy Boys" type adventures for young people.

Your formatting is splendid; the font is so large it comes through on mobile.

The second sentence needs a comma after "solving crime," and the third paragraph gets a bit messy at the end, with a dropped period. And at the dialogue where Isaac says "where are you" there should be a question mark, and "you're" is misspelled as "your." There may be other proofreading errors which you should tidy up throughout to create a more professional presentation *Smile*

I would highly suggest you enter this at "Twisted Tales Contest" Open in new Window. hosted by Arakun the twisted raccoon Author Icon. She'd love to read it, and I always need more competition there as it's an underrated contest *Laugh*

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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