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 I am a Top Hat Open in new Window. [ASR]
And I move around a board
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Greetings, Sonali!

I'm here for I Write 2025.

A brisk and cheerful poem we have here, personifying a chosen Monopoly piece as per the Writer's Cramp prompt. It captures some of the rollicking fun of the game, as we see people's small "fortunes" and "property portfolios" change hands with the toss of a die.

I like the repetition of lines and the way you've centered the text and made it nice and large.

At the third verse, I might suggest the phrase would rather be "end up" than "land up." And the comma at "what did you do" is superfluous. Other than that this piece flows well and conveys some of the fun of the classic board game.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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