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Review of summertime blues

Review by StephBee

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Rated: E

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My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM

A poem about what gives one the summertime blues.

WHAT I LIKED

The poem is very succinct and to the point, yet very visual using a good economy of words.

STRUCTURE

This is free form poem with no apparent rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. Good use of WDC ML

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Death valley temperatures," The line is short and direct, yet it invokes a lot of feeling. When one reads "death valley temperatures," hot comes to mind, and not just slight hot - hot to the point one is uncomfortable, sweating, with dry air in the lungs and not enough water.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening is barely enough to lure the reader in, but it is reflective of the nature of the poem - when it's hot, you don't want to do nothing but cool off. The title hints at the the emotional resonance of the poem. Direct expression, yet very visual.