Okay, it is pretty good. definite conflict with nature over the rain. the main character isn't as clear in my mind as he could be. Dialog is good but so is description. Yes his words illustrate his character but a little more description of his actions would be good.

THe format of this story and poem are a little confusing. It is hard to tell where the paragraphs start and stop. Also in short stories Dialog looks more like, ( So and so said, "I said this." then you end the paragraph and you have the second person respond. Other person said, "My response is ..." or "My response is..." THe other person said.) the key is making sure there is a clear paragraph break between the words spoken by different characters. On this site it is a good idea to put two returns between paragraphs to make things clear, the tab key does nothing in the text boxes.