Beanie Adam, I read "A Hopeless Poem" twice and must admit I did not grasp where you were going or where you were taking me. When I read it the second time, it seemed to have too many parts that did not relate or tie together.

Why I read it: It was a random selection from Writing.com
What I liked: The title. The poem actually lived up to its title -- "A Hopeless Poem."
Recommendation: A complete rewrite
What I would change: The loose way that lines seem to be thrown together.
Disclaimer: I am not an expert on these things or the various genres, so what I have written is purely from a reader's point of view. Please disregard any and all of my comments based on what you attempted to achieve. Remember, I am only one reader, and these were my takeaways.



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .