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 | Jumping High  [E] Up, up, and away!!  |
| (5.0)  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"  Hello, Angel bunny Easter eggs galore, aka dragonfish! INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:  I enjoyed reading your "Jumping High" poem every time I read it, including today. Your writing kept me riveted and I read the whole thing. Congratulations to you on completing eight whole years of the Contest Challenge! "The Contest Challenge" MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:  Happy Writing.Com Anniversary month! I read this "Jumping High" poem of yours sometime in the past and enjoyed it, but didn't have time to review it right then, so I flagged it for an anniversary review (meaning I saved the link to it in a special "April" file.  ). I hope you enjoy this review as a celebration of your time here and find the review uplifting and encouraging. It is meant to be honest and respectful, in accordance with WDC guidelines. I found your "Jumping High" poem to be fun and interesting to read, and I thought kids would love it. Even though I enjoyed "Jumping High" poem greatly, I had to wonder if it was all true. Last time, I didn't go check the facts, but today I did. According to kidszoo.com, "Kangaroos use body adaptations such as enlarged hind feet and a strong tail to help them hop. These adaptations allow some species of kangaroo, such as red and grey kangaroos, to efficiently hop 10 feet vertically, 40 feet horizontally, and reach speeds of over 30mph." Also, according to globalelephants.org, "An African Savanna elephant can grow to 30 ft. (9 meters) from trunk to tail, weigh more than 13,000 lbs. (6 tons/5,442 kilograms) and stand as tall as 12 ft. (4 meters) at the shoulder." So it's possible for a kangaroo to jump over a smaller African Elephant, it isn't possible for one to jump over the highest. I found that to be interesting. I would not have guessed that they could jump over anything but a baby elephant. I thought the free verse style of poetry worked well with the message of your poem. I liked that I could easily picture most of what you described in your poem. My favorite parts were those describing the extreme heat and the kangaroo's jumping ability. I wondered if this poem was part of a school assignment or if it was written for a contest or challenge here. I didn't notice any spelling mistakes in your "Jumping High" poem. I thought the animal and activity genres you selected for this poem were appropriate matches for it. Your description added to the fun feeling of your poem.IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER: In the spirit of helpfulness, and because of the requirements of a new reviewing challenge I joined recently, I have some little suggestions to make your piece stronger. If you're interested in some constructive criticism, read on. But if you aren't, no worries. Just know that I enjoyed your piece and move on to the next section. Still reading? You're brave! Yay for you!  I wondered if you'd ever seen a kangaroo in person? That'd be a fun thing to add in the notes comments, if you had. I hesitate to recommend this with free verse poems, because you're supposed to be free to do whatever you want with them. Still, I think it would have been a smoother read if there were a new stanza at the start of most, if not all, of the sentences. If you did enter this in a contest or challenge here and you remember the name of the contest or challenge you entered this poem in, I'd recommend adding that information, even if it can't be linked to anymore. It's interesting to know, at least to me, what the contest or challenge was. I'd recommend choosing a third genre, as we are allowed three, and people do search by genre here. Perhaps "nature," "science," "geography," "personal," or "experience" might be nice options to consider? There's a drop down list, as you know, because you had to use it to select “other". I don't have it memorized; those are just some suggestions. The actual list will probably be more helpful. Just to show it's not only me who recommends this, moderator Schnujo's Giving Away GPs  shared on the news feed in a comment on 2/21/2025 that “SM has told me, himself, that the #1 way people search for things to read on WdC is through the genre search, so if you aren't filling out all 3 genres, you are literally missing out on readers.” If you want to see the note and scroll down to see her whole comment, here’s the link: "Note: View this Note". It's always nice for me as a reader to have the poetry form and line count listed below the poem, perhaps in a "notes" section. I don't know how long it took me to start doing that, but once I did, readers responded favorably. So I'd recommend adding that information beneath your poem. It might help you get more future readers if you added a thumbnail picture to your story, if your membership level allows that. Pictures are attention getting and could help your story stand out in a list of search results. A kangaroo picture would be perfect for this poem, I think, especially one in the middle of a big jump. If you haven't already done so, I encourage you to enter this poem in the Shadows and Light Poetry Contest run by Rachel, aka choconut, username purplesunday. It only takes free verse poetry and I think your line count is within the limits. It encourages the hosts of contests to have more entries and I think she still needs more to award all prizes. The closing for this round might be in a few days, but a new one will start shortly thereafter. She tends to judge quickly. If you already entered another poem, the good news is that the new round will open hopefully on the 15th.As with any review, please take what serves you and release or ignore what doesn't. CONCLUSION:  I enjoyed reading your "Jumping High" poem, and thought it was interesting and fun to read. Thank you for sharing your time, creativity, heart, experiences, and writing with the Writing.Com community! Once again, happy anniversary month! I hope the year ahead is filled with blessings and joy for you!May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance, and may the Lord bless you and all that you do, during your anniversary month, and always! PWheeler   A SuperPower Reviewers Choice review!   Positive Hearts  A Review from: "Positive Hearts Reviews Group"  The B.E.A.R. Fund  ROAR   A Review to Congratulate You on Completing 8 Years of the Contest Challenge!: "The Contest Challenge"   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 04/13/2025 @ 7:35am EDT