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 School Shooting poem Open in new Window. [13+]
I wrote this poem after my friend survived a shooting at her high school.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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A school shooting - an event that many pray to never happen to them, but, sadly, there are those who end up having to go through one. Can't say that I had to deal with one, although my school did have a bomb scare once - long story short, someone had called a wrong number, said "Mom" and the listener thought that they had said "Bomb" - and the school had to be evacuated, with the students having to leave their coats and bags at the school. More annoyingly, if I recall correctly, I was in a gym class where we'd been walking outside when this happened, so we were stuck wearing our gym clothes on the way home. Then, there was the Shelter in Place drills, among others. Sad to have to think that we need to think about such things.

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An interesting piece to read.

Spelling and Grammar
Is there a special reason you've chosen to write "our" as "OUr", as you've done this twice in this poem? If there is, okay, and if not, that's the only thing I picked up on.

Well, this is the BIG BAD WOLF, and I howl at the moon every night.
HOWLLLLLLLLLLLLL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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