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| (5.0)  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"   First Impressions: That was a devastating story. Can’t say you didn’t warn me - I found it in "Bleak, Black, Warped and Twisted" - but it still hit hard. You took the contest prompt and flipped it on its head. This wasn’t the hopeful kind of dreaming of a wonderful event or a brighter future, but the torturous, relentless noise of a mind that can’t rest. Both the characters were very relatable. Jack, who went from the chaotic, fragmented outburst to a rare moment of lucidity and was able to explain what was going on in his mind. Rob, who was caught in his own inner conflict, his guilt, helplessness and the all too understandable desire for it all to just end. The moral question of what form that might take is quite topical at the moment, but I don’t think anyone who hasn’t been in that situation could possibly understand what it would take to make that decision.  Suggestions: The story was very well written and I didn’t notice any technical errors. I did spot one sentence that sounded a bit awkward: he didn't want to interrupt the flow, as the chances of Jack picking up the thread of the conversation again were slim to say the least. It seemed a little wordy, and I wonder if something simple like 'Jack was unlikely to find the thread again' might make it easier to follow.  Final Thoughts: I thought this was a great take on the prompt. The story raises some important questions and makes the readers feel uncomfortable. As readers, they get to walk away at the end without having to make any decisions, but it was a thought provoking tale that is likely to stay with them for a while.   A Review from: "Positive Hearts Reviews Group" This review is affiliated with The B.E.A.R. Fund , a community project that let's you earn exclusive merit badges just by reviewing! My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 04/14/2025 @ 6:57pm EDT