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 | Birthday Wishes  [13+] Sam deals with the social requirements of birthdays  |
| (5.0)  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"   First Impressions: That took an unexpected turn! I have to admit that I was with Sam all the way to the last paragraph - I, too, dread office birthdays. My name never went on the list because I equally hate having to write thank-you emails. Or should that be notes? Perhaps a thank you card would be appropriate… The issue was clearly exaggerated here, with the whole ‘birthday-minus-five’ thing to ensure that cards are bought and delivered on time, but that just added to the humour. The ending was all the more shocking. Although there was that punchline in the last paragraph, the straw that broke the camel's back, the tone changed rather suddenly.  Suggestions: Technically, the story was sound and I didn’t notice any grammatical errors. I only have two small suggestions:  You said this was a contest entry, but you didn’t name the contest or the prompt that inspired this entry. I would suggest adding a link to the contest at the bottom, and, if you remember it, the prompt you had to use and perhaps any limitations, like a word limit. You did put the word count at the end, which was helpful, but it is always interesting to know what inspired a tale. You chose Contest Entry, Holiday and Other as the genres. ‘Other’ isn’t very descriptive, and I would suggest picking something that describes the story better. Comedy, maybe? It fits most of the story.  Final Thoughts: My favourite part was when Sam made a list of birthday greetings that weren’t suitable. Thanks for coming to work half the time made me chuckle (there are one or two people I would like to give that card to!) Those are the kind of greetings my other half sends to his sister and I thought Sam did a great job coming up with them. I’m sure this story was fun to write, letting poor Sam get more and more frazzled by the strange tradition he never liked to begin with, and even though the ending was a little extreme, I enjoyed the read.   A Review from: "Invalid Item" This review is affiliated with The B.E.A.R. Fund , a community project that let's you earn exclusive merit badges just by reviewing! My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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