Your imagery was vivid and well-described. Each paragraph was full of really vibrant prose that painted a clear picture in the reader's mind.

It felt like there was a tendency to over-rely on certain language (bloom, petals, heady, etc.) and use those specific words so often that it became distracting from the narrative. There were also extended descriptions and use of repeated metaphors that derailed the story a bit. Those elements were well written and well-described, but carried on a bit too long, to the point where the actual story being told seemed to have taken a backseat to the flowery language and literary devices.

Overall, this was an entertaining read. You have a real knack for vivid, descriptive language. If you can balance that a little better with character development and narrative progression, I think you'll have a real standout item here. Nice work!