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 Love of a Lifetime Open in new Window. [E]
Not all mistakes you make are set in stone.
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Review by Cadie Laine Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*NoteP*          Hello, I would like to say thank you for entering the Tales of Seduction contest for the April round. I appreciate the hard work you've put in this piece.

*AsteriskV*NOTE: This review is meant to help and only offer an opinion of another author.

Personal Impressions~
*NoteP*          Your story was well thought out. I enjoyed reading it. The spacing was well placed.

Plot, Conflict and Structure~
*NoteP*          Luke gets the chance to change his fate. He married the wrong girl for the wrong reasons. He never really found out what happened to Michelle until he got the chance to go back in time and save her. Interesting twist that he looses his father in the process of saving Michelle. In the end they are going to change all their lives for the better.

Conclusions~
*NoteP*          You've done well following the prompt for this contest. I hope to see what happens next with this couple in the future. You've got a good start to the story. While it wasn't really necessary, there wasn't any character descriptions. Good personality descriptions. The interesting thing about this story is there wasn't a lot of description in terms of setting or of the characters. The reader implies what everything looks like through reading the story, good job with the use of your words and the count you have. The grammatics and spelling were flawless.

*NoteP* Thank you for sharing and Keep Writing!

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