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More Promptly Poetry PPC 5 Open in new Window. [13+]
More poems for Promptly Poetry, stuffed into this book because I have reached my limit.
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         Review for entry/chapter: "We'll Tell Everyone We Live in France" Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Greetings, Ned!

I'm here as a fellow member of the PPC5 challenge.

What a quietly elegant poem, evoking all of one's cozy preconceived notions in a few simple words: "let's move to France, darling."

You nailed the Dansa format, using a flowing, conversational rhythm which reads well and looks good on the page. I remember my first draft attempt, (which I might post someday) before I had a subject firmly in mind, used short, staccato lines and words which felt "glued together..."

I would suggest placing all the poetic form details into a dropnote at the bottom to keep it tidy. Overall, this is a lovely, picturesque poem and a creative take on the prompt form.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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