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 The Eternal Youth Spell Open in new Window. [E]
Old witch desires her youth.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Greetings, Sue!

I'm here for I Write 2025.

Well, this is a fun read. I love the rhythm and rhyme, the simple ABAB scheme, and how the story flows along in an old-fashioned way, like Nathaniel Hawthorne or Longfellow.

At first I was going to object to the "happy" ending and suggest there should be a moralizing twist, but that was partly based on the mistaken assumption that the old witch stole someone else's youthful body. But when I looked again I saw she was able to retrieve her own younger self and become renewed, which is what pretty much everyone on the planet would like to do *Laugh*

So, as a poem, it's great, capturing some of that witchy vibe without her causing harm to anyone. I enjoyed reading it, and am glad I took a moment to slow down and read it again.

Now I'm left wondering what happens next... Will she have to keep running that spell every few decades? Or is it eternal as the title implies? There's usually some catch to magic, which is what fantasy yarns are woven of.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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