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A Poem from Squantz Pond Open in new Window. [E]
The first poem I’ve ever written.
by Kate Author Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Greetings, Kate, and welcome to writing.com *Hug1**Smile**Hug2*

Sorry I didn’t review your first poem sooner. I usually just do one review a day, and there are so many different things I find interesting. Also, poetry is kind of hard for me to review, because I don’t like “picking it apart” and imposing ideas on someone’s heart and soul that they’ve poured into their work. So, I never know quite what to say *Pthb*

First off, congrats on joining! I see you have a year’s upgraded membership. That will allow you to have a bunch of stuff in your portfolio, but you’ll have to either work really hard around here to earn GPs to keep it up, or just pay cash, or depend on the generosity of others. Or you can maintain fewer than ten port items and leave it at a free membership. Your choice *Smile*

I love the simple brevity of this poem, the symmetry, the repetition, the flow. I might think it’s a little too brief… is there a way you would like to add more descriptive elements? Perhaps the blue gleam of sky on water shines in your eyes? Or maybe the faint chirping of birds heralds the coming of summer? Or rather, seeing the “majestic autumn tones,” perhaps there’s a squirrel gathering acorns before the first frost? Is any of this necessary, or is it my own flowery thoughts? Just ignore me *Laugh*

You should use Size 4 Verdana font; your friend Allan Charles 🐾 2340534 Author Icon will tell you that’s my favorite *BigSmile* I picked it up from my friend Reader at Large Author Icon - you might want to check out his port if you like thrills, chills, and hoopla. Anyway, that’s the best font for clarity and ease of sight across devices. It’ll make your poem stand out against our buzzing sidebars and upper tabs.

Perhaps also you should tell us a little something about yourself in your bio block: young, old, writing experience, tastes, preferences, greetings, etc. It makes you a little more human for us.

Aside from that, I really enjoyed reading this and I’m glad you’re here!

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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