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Watching Time Fly Open in new Window. [E]
What happens when time forgets what time it is?
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*PenB* First Impressions:

A very clever story that immediately hooked me with the opening paragraph. There was a sense of urgency in the descriptions of the watch running backwards and then stopping, which was actually an improvement. And who was Walter? You made sure that the readers would continue after that opening, and I thought it was very well done.

The absurdity started to become clear when the narrator explained, “I arrived at the bus stop hours before I left the house” There was a nice build-up from personal inconvenience to full-on cosmic disruption, which was handled with a dry humour throughout the story. The introduction of Walter was charmingly understated. His appearance and behaviour were odd but not overly dramatised, which makes the slow reveal of his true identity feel both humorous and oddly believable within the logic of the story.


*PenG* Suggestions:

The story was very polished and technically, I couldn’t find anything wrong with it. The only thing I might say is that the ending felt a little rushed, and I wasn’t sure how getting Father Time back to Greenwich would fix everything. I loved the last line though, and perhaps the ‘how’ wasn’t important.


*PenP* Final Thoughts:

This story was very imaginative, and I particularly enjoyed the sense of low-key chaos. The narrator never seemed particularly disturbed by any of this, more curious, and his descriptions of the strange events were quite matter of fact, so much so that I had to read a few sentences twice to make sure I got what was going on.

I’m not wearing a watch but I did check the clock on the mantelpiece. It had stopped - most likely because I forgot to wind it up, although after reading this story, I wasn’t sure *Laugh*




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