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A Well for Ọdògba Open in new Window. [E]
A woman returns to her village to fulfill a childhood promise to bring water.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Greetings, and welcome to writing.com!

I noticed this on the Read a Newbie sidebar and thought it looked intriguing.

I love this peaceful story of determination and strength, set in Nigeria. The context is rich, with subtle, well researched details that place us into the geography of the area. Just for fun, I Googled the name of your village and the only result was this item on WdC *Smile* Isn't that cool?

You have enough gentle, realistic conflict here to keep us awake, but nothing too upsetting or dramatic. It's a soothing, optimistic story about the possibilities of what one can do for the people back home if one works hard enough. Some people may be cynical and object to such a happy ending type of thing, but I think this is a great story for children to give them hope to dream big, no matter their circumstances.

I would highly recommend you add a cover image to this item, so it stands out against the wall of bland items in the lists when one browses. Speaking of browsing, you should also use a third relevant genre, rather than "Contest Entry." Using all three relevant genres gives you more opportunities to be discovered by readers, and also as many opportunities as possible to be nominated for a Quill Award. I would suggest "Nature," "Women's," "Technology," "Foreign" or "Community."

Also, I saw this first on my iPad, but I can't remember if you settled for the default font size. I always recommend Size 4 Verdana, which can be found by using the row of tiles above the text entry box. If you need any help, you can check out "Writing.Com 101" Open in new Window. or click on the question mark between the script M and the smiley face on those tiles.

You may also want to add a word count to the top or bottom of the item, if you're entering this into a contest.

I really enjoyed this and hope to see more from you in the future.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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