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 Cloud Watching in Fountainbleu  Open in new Window. [13+]
Taking a full day to enjoy a beautiful park area just south of Paris, France.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Greetings, Carly!

I’m here for I Write 2025 *Smile*

This is a lovely, relaxing little story… I hope that doesn’t sound condescending. I know it’s not the usual exciting tale of drama, action, or character development, but stories like this, that engage the senses in a soothing, easygoing way, are a genre in their own right. Something like "cozy comfort" or similar, I can't remember exactly. It's kind of a modern thing.

Anyway, it actually sounds rather autobiographical, in which case it must have been an enjoyable time indeed. It's almost like a journal entry in that regard, capturing a glimpse of three friends having a good time in nature.

I have to point out, this appears to have been written and published quite hastily. You've settled for the default font size, which on my iPad is a tiny and boring font indeed. I would highly recommend using Size 4 Verdana for clarity and a more engaging reading experience. A friend of mine likes to compare the default font to a used car contract, and he's right *Laugh*

Next, there are about a dozen minor typos scattered throughout, indicative of a rapid typing up. I know one's fingers can fly all too fast on the first draft, but that's what Grammarly is for. I would highly recommend you go in at some point and clean up the typos for a more professional appearance. ("Publication-worthy" deserves a hyphen, otherwise it's quite difficult to parse right there in the opening paragraph.)

Other than that, this was a fun read. Is it a vignette of some characters you're working with at the moment?

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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