Hello,

A nice poem with some lovely rhyming that fairly skipped along.

Although, the language in V2 is a bit muddled - and the concepts in V3 seem a tad abstract, in the context of this narrative.

But for me, this poem doesn't say enough - together is good, fighting is bad - needs something more perhaps....a final warning not to rush in to taking vows - or something at the beginning, foreboding events?

Loved all the wonderful in-rhymes - the mark of true rhymster..............Em