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 "Lafitte Coin" Open in new Window. [E]
She found a coin and wanted to sell it, but the privateer had other ideas.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*PenB* First Impressions:

I have to admit I know very little about Jean Lafitte other than what I learned from an old movie many years ago. Judging by that, the part about the treasure and the curse seemed very plausible. The backstory was interesting and I could imagine the scene, the final moments of the once proud pirate, quite well.

The main character was well drawn and I could imagine her, too, not wanting to give away something that was clearly valuable because of some old superstition. The fact that no one wanted to accept the coin should have given her a clue, but she chose not to believe the old tale, which she came to regret in the end.


*PenG* Suggestions:

The story was well written and I only have one small suggestion, regarding her name. You started the story referring to her simply as "she", which worked for me - characters don't always have to have a name. However, later in the story you mentioned her full name, and a few paragraph on you referred to her by her first name and then by her surname. I think it your want to name her, it needs to happen right at the beginning, and then it works best if your stick to her first name or "she" when you refer to her.


*PenP* Final Thoughts:

I liked the middle part where you described how her life fell apart because she owned the cursed coin and refused to give it to the poor. It would be a difficult thing to do, but in the end the ghost of the old pirate 'persuaded' her to do the right thing. Unfortunate, it seemed that large parts of her life were already broken beyond repair, and I did feel for her because no one in their right mind would have believed that legend. A good story; I enjoyed the read!




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